Today I'm going to focus on Chapter Three: Never Say He Thought/She Thought. This is where I have trouble and I'd like to work on it.
In Deep POV [Point of View], you will not need to write he thought/she thought. The same goes for he felt/she felt... he knew/she knew... wondered... realized... speculated... decided... wished... etc. These phrases are death to Deep POV, because they create narrative distance. Readers are now at arm's length from the character, not in the POVC's [Point of View Character's] head where they belong.
A narrator is required in order to say that a character "knew" something or "felt" something or "wondered" something. Inside ourselves, we rarely preface or follow our thought with those kinds of words. We simply think what we think without saying to ourselves that we "thought" it or "wondered" it or "knew " it. If we are inside a certain character's psyche, why would we need to say he thought/knew/realized/felt something, etc., when we can proceed directly to whatever it was that the character thought?
There are a lot of examples of Shallow POV vs. DPOV. Here is just one sample:
Shallow POV: He thought a good bath wouldn't hurt the dog.
Deep POV: Whew! A good bath would do this dog a world of good.
Besides all the before and examples, there are before and after exercises at the end of each chapter so that you can practice changing a shallow POV sentence to DPOV. Here's one you can try yourself.
Shallow: He wondered whether she would show up for his birthday party.
This book definitely has a lot to offer with chapters covering Point of View Basics, Deep POV Is/Deep POV Isn't, Name that Feeling-Not!, and more.
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